I just finished writing Year of the Dog ! It had a massive plot hole that I had to fix which turned out to be more work than I expected. Here’s a snippet: “Hey, Auntie Nell.” He wrapped his arms around her, bussing her on the cheek and breathing in pikake flowers and shortbread cookies. And suddenly he was nine years old again, and her solid presence had made his chaotic world stable once more. “What are you doing here?” He usually took her to dinner on Wednesday nights, but today was Tuesday. The edges of her smile faltered a little before brightening right back up again. “What, I can’t visit my nephew?” She angled around him to enter his home. “Is this your new house? Looks lovely.” Which was a blatant lie, because the fixer-upper was barely livable, much less acceptable to a neat-freak like his aunt. She also left four matching pink and purple floral suitcases on the stoop behind her. Only then did Ashwin notice the cab driver standing slightly to the side of the walkway. “Can ...
Captain's Log, Supplemental
I just saw this movie with the Captain and it was rather good. We were both especially impressed with the hard-hitting commentary on society and the internet.
Click here to see the trailer on Youtube
It’s a pretty gruesome movie, so I wouldn’t let a junior high school student watch it, but it’s got a fascinating premise about a killer who tortures his victims on a live internet feed, and the victim dies faster the more people who log on to see the torture.
Now ’fess up, isn’t that a fascinating commentary on society these days?
What was really cool was that they had a script doctor take the initial premise of the script and restructure it so that it had more psychological and Hollywood appeal.
The script doctor emphasized the character of the lead heroine, giving her more depth. He also formed a connection between the victims and a backstory and motivation for the killer (versus just being some psycho doing it for fun, which is kind of boring in terms of story). He did a few other things, too, but I don’t want to give the story away.
So while it was an entertaining movie, it was also good for me to improve my writing craft.
I think the Captain is tired of watching movies with me because I analyze story and character—I can’t help it, I’m a writer. And when something is done badly, he’s the one who hears my moaning and complaining about it.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. Has anyone else seen the movie? What did you think?
I just saw this movie with the Captain and it was rather good. We were both especially impressed with the hard-hitting commentary on society and the internet.Click here to see the trailer on Youtube
It’s a pretty gruesome movie, so I wouldn’t let a junior high school student watch it, but it’s got a fascinating premise about a killer who tortures his victims on a live internet feed, and the victim dies faster the more people who log on to see the torture.
Now ’fess up, isn’t that a fascinating commentary on society these days?
What was really cool was that they had a script doctor take the initial premise of the script and restructure it so that it had more psychological and Hollywood appeal.
The script doctor emphasized the character of the lead heroine, giving her more depth. He also formed a connection between the victims and a backstory and motivation for the killer (versus just being some psycho doing it for fun, which is kind of boring in terms of story). He did a few other things, too, but I don’t want to give the story away.So while it was an entertaining movie, it was also good for me to improve my writing craft.
I think the Captain is tired of watching movies with me because I analyze story and character—I can’t help it, I’m a writer. And when something is done badly, he’s the one who hears my moaning and complaining about it.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. Has anyone else seen the movie? What did you think?
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