Tuesday, June 20, 2006

The Story Sensei critique service

Captain’s Log, Stardate 06.20.2006

Blog book giveaway:
My Thursday book giveaway is A SOUNDING BRASS by Shelley Bates.
My Monday book giveaway is WAKING LAZARUS by TL Hines.
You can still enter both giveaways. Just post a comment on each of those blog posts. On Thursday, I'll draw the winner for A SOUNDING BRASS and post the title for another book I'm giving away. Stay tuned.

Open for business! I had previously stopped doing manuscript critiques for my critique service, The Story Sensei, and just focused on high-level structural critiques based on synopses.

Now I've opened up The Story Sensei to manuscript critiques again.

Update: See my Story Sensei blog for updated prices. I have a limited-time special price of $1 per 100 words (computer word count), PARTIAL or FULL manuscript.

I will identify any weaknesses in story structure, character arcs, writing style, and other aspects of a high-level critique. I will also analyze your manuscript for key writing and story elements:

• Opening hook/scene
• Pacing
• POV (point of view)
• Smooth dialogue, necessary, no redundancies
• Distinct character voices
• Adverbs
• Passive verbs
• Backstory
• Description, vivid picture, 5 senses
• Show vs. tell
• Rhythm/balance between narrative and dialogue
• Tags vs. beats
• Unique prose or clichĂ©
• Character emotions
• Voice
• Scene structure--goal, conflict, disaster/reaction, dilemma, decision
• Scene necessity/redundancies

I often offer suggestions and brainstorming ideas as a jumping-off point for you to strengthen the cohesiveness and emotional impact of your story.

Visit my Story Sensei blog to find out more about The Story Sensei critique service and to read what other clients have said about my services.
http://www.storysensei.com/

TMI:

Diet: Still exercising, I did it all last week although I didn't for the weekend, but I did it yesterday and I felt great. I’m pretty happy with myself, even though my body still jiggles (I absolutely hate that jiggling feeling. Anybody else? I just think of JELL-O).

So is my care about my body fat putting the wrong emphasis on beauty?

On a good note, I can really feel my back getting stronger and not having as many aches and pains. I think it’s the yoga and the pilates from Denise Austin’s exercise programs.

As a writer, my back really is my lifeline. Well, I guess my wrists and shoulders are, too, but I have an ergonomic keyboard to help with those, and my problems have always been with my back.

A new (and very expensive) ergonomic chair helped, but sitting in it for 10 hours a day or more kind of cancels out the beneficial effects.

How about you guys? Aches? Pains? Need prayer?

5 comments :

  1. I’m pretty happy with myself, even though my body still jiggles (I absolutely hate that jiggling feeling. Anybody else? I just think of JELL-O).

    AMEN! I hate that feeling too!!

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  2. I hate that jiggly feeling too. And after two kids and age forty on the horizon, it feels more like a daily battle with gravity. But I do find that working out with weights and yoga helps a ton with my back, neck and shoulders. I really notice a difference when I don't do it.

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  3. I've been battling with my weight ever since my hysterectomy. A friend of mine recently lost a ton of weight, so nosey me asked her how. No dieting! Can you believe it? She went out and bought that dance mat craze (Dance Dance Revolution). So, I copy catted and did the same. What fun! I do it for 30 minutes to an hour, five days a week. Doesn't seem like exercise and it is a blast, when I can get it away from my 15 year old son!

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  4. I was close to 160 lbs. at 5' 4" about a year ago. Then I just lost my appetite and now I'm down to 110 lbs. Stress did most of that. But should have been exercising as wall, as Camy said. There's one exercise I that I loved doing in the shower before I lost my most helpful one (dedicated shower, if you want). The one is bath-tubs just don't do the same thing for me. Anyway, I'd stand in the corner opposite the spray, the flat hands positioned on each wall at shoulder height about 18" from the corner. Place your feet slightly apart and so that you can lean forward without having your heels lose contact with the floor. Lean forward for a count of five. Do this 10 times. I loved finding the stretch and tightening in my back muscles and having the warm to very warm water spray on my back. This can also be done in a doorway but I'v had bad hands for a few decads already and this exercise in a doorway seemed to tear every ligament or whatever. So I stuck to the corner. I'll see if I can find the exact directins from my exercise program if anybody needs it. After doing this for a good bit of time, I found myself sitting comfortably erect even at the computer. A big surprise!

    That no longer holds true now, alas. I feel like a little bundle of nerves, bones and muscles at the computer nowadays. I also sit straighter if I sit crosslegged on my chair. I asked my doctor if that was okay. He just smiled at me (and I thought I'd asked a really stupid question). But he said: "Why do you think more than half the people in the world sit like that?" Without the chair of course.

    With your weight or the jiggling, I really wouldn't worry about that unless it has an impact on your health in any way, psychological or physical.

    I have an Obus chair but without the exercise I was trying to describe, it doesn't help all that much. I think I'll just have to go with the exercises in the bathtub's other corner as a place to do the exercises daily without the warm water. Better than not doing it at all and I seem to have no other good corners in this place. Thanks for reminding me to do that one at least. I'll definitely need constant reminding unless I can get back into a routine and do some of the other exercises as well.

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  5. Ugh, I'm making so many more typing mistakes recently and not seeing them when I proofread. I hope my new glasses will help. I think I got the ok for them in the mail today.

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